In recent years, there has been a rise in the use of performance-enhancing drugs in sports. What are the consequences of doping for athletes? What measures should be taken to combat this issue?

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Over the
last
few years, we can observe the growth of
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performance-enhancing drugs (PED) in sport. There are a lot of
people
who are concerned about
this
trend. In
this
essay, I am going to consider the consequences of using similar medications and suggest some solutions to figure
this
problem out. Nowadays,
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of many drugs is frighteningly high. There are a lot of medicines with
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components, which can influence your performance in sport.
However
, using
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these remedy
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may lead to many health issues
such
as heart problems, hormonal system disorders and changes in lugs.
Moreover
, it might be
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of
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damage. Another really important influence of
this
method that improves
athletes
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results is that the competitions become unfair for
people
, who want to rival honesty. Every competition turns into
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producers
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race. To tackle
this
problem,
people
should increase education in
this
area. Sports authorities should warn about the consequences, provide workshops and launch special campaigns. They
also
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advertisements with well-known sportsmen who won without the drugs. Another idea is to make anti-doping policies more strictly.
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, they can provide regular and surprise drug tests, impose harsh penalties and give permanent disqualifications. These restrictions could make taking these medical supplies really unpleasant for both beginners and professionals.
To conclude
, the challenge with
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of using
PED
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PEDs
is becoming more serious. It has a lot of aftermath for the athlete’s
heath
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health
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and competitions in general. To solve
this
problem we should use all possible opportunities to educate
people
and punish unfair sportsmen.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Performance-enhancing drugs (PEDs)
  • Doping
  • Anabolic steroids
  • Health ramifications
  • Stigmatization
  • Disqualification
  • Anti-doping agencies
  • Therapeutic Use Exemptions (TUEs)
  • Integrity of sports
  • Biological passport
  • In-competition testing
  • Out-of-competition testing
  • Whistleblower
  • Ban substances
  • Suspension
  • World Anti-Doping Agency (WADA)
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