The given bar chart illustrates how many males and females played six different sports in English cities during 2012.

The given bar chart illustrates how many males and females played six different sports in English cities during 2012.
The bar chart gives data on the number of
man
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men
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and women
played
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who played
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six types
sports
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of sports
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in English cities in the year
of
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2012. As an
overall
trend, it's clear that
the
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highset
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high
proportion of boys chose to play football,
while
a very large majority of girls participated in Swimming. On the one hand, Football in which a
significiant
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significant
percentage of men had been enrolled. The second most enlisted subject was Tennis as 50% of boys participated in
this
sports
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sport
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. The remaining fields of
sports
are
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Swimming, Cycling, Badminton and Hockey saw a midium down, with
approxiamately
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approximately
41%, 37%, 30% and 15%, respectively.
On the other hand
, a very large percentage of females chose the subject of Swimming.
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, Badminton and Tennis held the second and
the
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third place in the most engaged
sports
by women, which are around 40% and 37%,
respectivily
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respectively
. The leftovers had a sharp deduction compared with the top three
variety
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varieties
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of
sports
chosen by boys, and
they
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are Football, Cycling and Hockey, with the
percenteage
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percentage
of 21%, 20% and 10%, respectively.
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