The diagram below shows the lifecyle of silkworm and the production of silk cloth
The first
stage
illustrates the stages in the life of a moth, while
the second diagram shows the process of silk cloth production.
Overall
, it is clear that
there are five stages in the life cycle of a moth from eggs to adult insect
. Fix the agreement mistake
insects
Moreover
, the production cycle is in five clear phases that starts
with selecting cocoons and finishing Change the verb form
start
in
dying the woven cloth.
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apply
Initially
, eggs are laid on a leaf and remain there for about ten days. After
this
, silkworm larva emerges from the eggs and continues in that form for four to six weeks. After
this
stage
is complete, silkworm
spins a protective layer of Correct article usage
the silkworm
cocoon
around itself that is
made out of a single thread of silk which happens in three to eight days. By this
stage
, the cocoon
is formed and the 16 days of motionless stage
begins. Eventually, the adult moth emerges from the cocoon
and the life cycle starts again.
The second diagram shows that selected
Correct article usage
the selected
cocoon
is boiled in the water and given a sunbath. Subsequently
, unwinding the 300-900 meters thread is a
next phase. After that, multiple threads are twisted and entwined together to Correct article usage
the
then
be woven into a cloth, followed by dying
process, which is Correct article usage
the dying
a
final step.Correct article usage
the
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