The graph below gives information about the preferred leisure activities of Australian children. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown leisure activities of Australian children

The graph below gives information about the preferred leisure activities of Australian children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown

leisure activities of Australian children
The graph shows data about the favourite exercises of
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australian
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kids
Overall
, children which are
boys
and
girls
, all of them like to watch TV and videos, but their are do not prefer skateboarding and rollerblading. As it is obvious from
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there are two groups which are called
boys
and
girls
,
fot
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for
the former they are always overtaking
girls
in all aspects, but the latter they are always staying constant in 3 spheres which are bike riding,
electronic
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, art and craft. The percentage is over 60.
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boys
are
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always stagger their
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in preference.
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,
boys
less like
art
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and
craft
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with skateboarding,
in
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percentages of these exercises are 38% and 36% respectively.
Girls
also
do not rely
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skateboarding too and
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of usage is just 23%.
Boys
are leading not only in computer games by taking 81% of usage and the second their favourite exercise is bike riding which is 77%.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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