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in many countries new homes are needed but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. some people believe it is important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there what is your opinion ? give reasons and examples

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People argue that it is important to protect rural areas and not build new houses there. On the one hand, many countries need new houses as a place to live for their residents. Because over time the
population
 increases both
due to
 births and migration of people.
And the
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 reality is that there is still a lot of
land
 in the
village
 that can be used as
land
 to build houses. I don't agree with that, because in my opinion, if it is possible for
land
 in the
village
 to be used as housing
land
,
that is
 perfectly legal. As long as the
development
 does not harm the residents there and does not damage the beauty of the
village
. What I don't agree with is when all
land
 in a
village
 is used as housing
land
 so that the surrounding ecosystem is damaged. As long as not all the
land
 is used as housing, I agree because there is limited
land
 and urgent
land
 needs. The only way is to build housing in villages. The strong reason I don't agree with
this
 statement is because we need an even distribution of the
population
,
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 so that the
population
 is not only full in one area so that the others are not. Because equal distribution of
population
 is very important for the survival of citizens. Apart from getting economic comfort,
development
 will
also
 be equitable, and
development
 will
also
 be equitable. There will be no
such
 thing as a builder who only exists in one area
while
 other areas are lagging behind in
development
.
That is
 the reason I do not agree with the argument that house construction should not be carried out in villages
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