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The diagram shows differences in temperature zones between tropical mountains and temperate mountains Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram shows differences in temperature zones between tropical mountains and temperate mountains Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The picture compares the climate situations between two
mountains
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; tropical and temperate based on their
altitude
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 levels.
Overall
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, the tropical
mountains
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 have more varied temperature categorization
along with
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 the advantages that are taken from that condition compared to the temperate
mountains
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. Both
mountains
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 are predominantly used to cultivate several corps until around 5,000
feets
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feet
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 above the sea. or more than 1,500
height
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in height
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. In the tropical region, the first 1,000
metres
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 are filled with tropical
vegetations
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vegetation
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,
while
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mountains
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 in the cool region cultivate general
corps
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crops
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,
such
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 as grains, potatoes, and flax.
Suprisingly
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Surprisingly
,
on
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at
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the
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a
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 height of more than
1,000
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1,000,
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 it is still possible for people in tropical
country
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countries
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 to cultivate grains
in
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at
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 that
altitude
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, whilst the area on the temperate
mountains
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are
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is
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 dominated by forest, which
located
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is located
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on
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at
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the
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an
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altitude
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 of approximately 3,500
metres
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 on the tropical
mountains
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. Reaching the peak zone, the maximum height of the temperate
mountains
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 only
account
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accounts
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 for around 3,400
metres
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 above the sea with the snow
covers
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covering
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 the top of the mountain. Similar to that situation,
also
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 occurs in the tropical
mountains
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 at
the
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an
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altitude
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 of 4,500
metres
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 just after the alpine meadows zone.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words mountains, altitude, metres with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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