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Writing Samples
Band 7.5

A friend you made while you were studying abroad has written to ask you for help in finding a job in your country. You have heard about a job in a local company that might be suitable for him/her. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter tell your friend about the job and what sort of work it involves say why you think the job would be suitable for him/her explain how to apply for the job

Dear Sam, I hope
this
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 letter finds you in good spirits. I am writing to inform you of a remarkable job opportunity at a
company
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 located in my area, which completely aligns with your capabilities. The
company
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 requires a person who is talented in
cyber security
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cybersecurity
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, which is related to your field.
This
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 career
also
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 offers a combination of remarkable features,
such
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 as a high income, opportunities for promotion, and a range of amenities the
company
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 provides, from free accommodation to engaging trips. What makes me consider
this
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 profession a great one for you is your experience and unique creative skills, which set you on a continuous path of promotion within the
company
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.
Also
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, in today's modern era, companies hire those who have innovative ideas, since
this
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 feature enhances their competitiveness in markets. If you desire to apply for the job, you must send your application to the
company
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 through their website, which is www.gigabayt.com. You must
also
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 prepare a reference letter from someone who lives there; I have prepared it and attached it to the letter. I hope to see you again. If you need any
further
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 information, please feel free to contact me via email or phone. Best regards, Mohammadreza

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content
Add more clear job duties and needed skills to show how Sam fits the role.
structure
Make some ideas end in their own paragraph to keep the flow clean.
action
Be clear on how to apply, not only with a site link; show a simple step to send the app.
tone
Use plain, simple words and avoid long phrases so the letter is easy to read.
tone
Warm, friendly tone and a polite close.
content
The letter tells the job, why Sam fits, and how to apply.
structure
The opening and closing feel kind and show care for Sam.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • reputation
  • industry
  • duties and responsibilities
  • typical day
  • skills and experiences
  • job requirements
  • company culture
  • personality
  • work ethic
  • application process
  • job listing
  • submit an application
  • documents required
  • tailored resume
  • cover letter
  • relevant experiences
  • reviewing documents
  • practicing for interviews
  • promptly
  • deadlines
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