You have been busy with your studies for the past month and haven't had time to visit your family. Write a letter to your grandmother. In your letter: Apologize for not getting in touch with her sooner Explain why you have been so busy Arrange a time to visit Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Grandmother,

Dear Grandmother, In my opinion, you are feeling. I am writing to apologize because I couldn't go a few days ago on the grounds that I was cracked up and I lied at the hospital. Right now, health me. Please accept my sincerest apologies for going home. In the future, I am going to be a capable "Lawyer". What do you think? In spite of
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I am planning a lot of lessons to meet you soon.
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, I will buy sweets and presents for you. Once again, sincerest apologies for going to your home. Take care. Yours sincerely, Daniel
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Coherence & Cohesion
Be sure to clearly organize your thoughts and ideas. It seems there are places where the ideas could flow more logically to improve the letter's coherence.
Task Achievement
Try to address all parts of the task more completely. A clearer explanation of why you were not in touch, a detailed reason for your busy schedule, and a specific arrangement for visiting could enhance your letter.
General Tip
Using natural and varied language can enhance the impact of your message. Consider using expressions and phrases that naturally fit in the context of writing to a family member to improve the tone of your letter.
Tone
Your sincere apologies and respect towards your grandmother come through, which is great for the tone of your letter.
Tone
Concluding the letter with a caring message shows a nice touch in maintaining a personal and warm connection.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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