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People now days send text massages more frequently than they talk the phone. What are the reasons for this trend ? Do the advantages of texting out weigh the disadvantages ?

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Nowadays,
instead
 of talking by
phone
,
people
 are likely to send messages by
text
 to others. It has become a trend in society, particularly in the younger generations.
Although
 there are some benefits and drawbacks,
however
, in my opinion, the positive sides far outweigh the negative impact.
This
 essay will examine the reasons why. On the one hand, sending messages is more convenient and simple. It allows for quick and concise communication certainly for
people
 with busy lifestyles. It does not take a long time to take your
phone
, type some words,
then
 send it to the receiver. Texting is less intrusive and enables
people
 to respond at their own convenience.
For example
,
people
 with a hectic schedule can not stand by on their phones 24/7 a day. They can reply to the
text
 in their free time or when they do not have any emerging activities to do at the moment without feeling pressured to answer immediately or guilty because they can not take the
phone
 calls.
On the other hand
, messaging
also
 potentially caused issues. Talking by
text
 lacks intonation despite we say it by speaking. It could lead to miscommunication.
For instance
, we can not know whether the sender is mad at us or not because we can not hear the rise and fall of their voice, it is full of
text
.
Moreover
, the more frequently we send
text
 back and forth, can increase screen time usage of the
phone
 because we focus on waiting for the incoming message and swiftly replying to it.
To conclude
, the development of the era has changed the preferences of
people
 in the way of their communication. Most of them
favor
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favour
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 texting over making
phone
 calls because of the ease of use and
simple
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simplicity
show examples
, and
i
Change the capitalization
I
show examples
 totally agree with
this
.
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task response
Ensure that your essay has a strong, clear thesis statement in your introduction. Your conclusion should also summarize the key points made in the essay and reflect back on the thesis.
coherence and cohesion
Consider organizing your essay into clear paragraphs, each with a single main idea. This helps the reader follow your argument more easily. Use proper connective words to link ideas within and across paragraphs.
task response
While you made general claims about the reasons people prefer texting and the problems it can create, your essay would benefit from specific examples to illustrate your points. This adds credibility and depth to your argument.
coherence and cohesion
The essay's structure could be improved by ensuring that there is a clear introductory paragraph, at least two body paragraphs that each focus on one main point, and a closing paragraph that summarizes and concludes the essay. This will help with logical structure and presentation.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • concise
  • multitasking
  • intrusive
  • discreetly
  • asynchronous
  • nonverbal cues
  • introverted
  • miscommunication
  • coordination
  • screen time
  • digital dependency
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