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Band 3.5

Scientific research can be the most effective when done by private companies. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Research
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 is a process of
study
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 to confirm
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whether a hypothesis is right or wrong and it takes a
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 of
money
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 and time to
conduct
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research
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. In my
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opinion
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 partly agree with
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 statement. First of all, to
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research
 something you need a
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 of
money
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manpowers
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manpower
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 how the drug
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human
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 body, you need a large amount
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money
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 to buy
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 and chemicals for the test, and
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 a
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researcher
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 are needed to test and collect the data,
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 many participants because the larger the number ,the more reliable it becomes. So that private
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 that have a
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 of funds can
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effective
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, some small
companies
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efficient
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 some industries may try to
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research
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 with the purpose of promoting their products. So it might not be an effective
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. To illustrate, some firms might advertise their merchandise to be healthy, but if you look up their
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 participants,
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 making it unreliable. In conclusion, I believe that some private
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fruitful
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 with their
finaces
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finances
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, some
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 can not
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in
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 funds and some
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 despite having enough power is not a good one. Because they just want to use it as
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coherence cohesion
To elevate your logical structure score, make sure your essay follows a clear and organized sequence. Each paragraph should present a single main idea, followed by supporting details and examples.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion are essential for framing your argument. They should clearly present your stance on the topic and summarize the main points of your discussion. Work on refining these for a stronger impact.
coherence cohesion
To score higher on supporting main points, aim to develop each paragraph with more elaborate examples and evidence. This enhancement will make your argument more persuasive and your reasoning more comprehensive.
task achievement
Ensure that your response is complete by directly addressing the question prompt throughout your essay. Avoid straying from the topic and maintain a consistent argument to improve your score.
task achievement
For a higher score in presenting clear and comprehensive ideas, focus on the precision and clarity of your arguments. Avoid ambiguous statements and strive for concrete, well-explained concepts that readers can easily follow.
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To better the integration of relevant and specific examples, ground your arguments in more detailed and pertinent illustrations or case studies. This not only supports your points but also demonstrates a deeper understanding of the topic.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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