It is sometimes said that people who think only about themselves are happier because they get what they want. Others say that selfish people have no friends and are usually lonely. Why do you think some people act selfishly? Is it good to be selfish?
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statement, and there are two opinions to support my statements.
First of all, we often directly judge a person as a
selfish, because we use our personal Correct article usage
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to define what kind of person they are. Before Fix the agreement mistake
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a judgement, it is better to learn deeply about him or her. Change the verb form
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, we know the truth that our mate is an orphan and his money is very limited, that’s why he will manage his expenditure carefully. Fix the agreement mistake
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In other words
, try to understand others
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on others
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Secondly
, the generation in this
modern time especially the milenials
love to use the word “logic” Correct your spelling
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instead
of “selfish”. It is fair enough to secure the resources to fulfill
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This
kind of logical thinking is accepted by most of society, while
the rest of people
believe that’s the
form of selfishness. Correct article usage
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For example
, I will feed my family first before I think about otherselves
. That act of service is rational, and it is totally not selfish.
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charateristics
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