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The line graph gives information relating to the average number of British travelers using car, bus and train to commute on a daily basis over a period of 6 decades, starting from 1970.

The line graph gives information relating to the average number of British travelers using car, bus and train to commute on a daily basis over a period of 6 decades, starting from 1970.
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The provided line graph shows the information about the
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avarage
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average
 number of
Uk
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UK
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 commuters travelling each day by car, bus or train between 1970 and 2030. In general, it is clear from the graph that the rate of
a
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British
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travelers
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travellers
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 using
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the car
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car
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cars
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 was the highest trend daily during a period of 6 decades from 1970 to 2030.
According to
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 what was
showing
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shown
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, the
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avarage
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average
 of number commuters who were using
bus
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the bus
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 daily was slowly decreasing from 1970 to 2030 and they will be the lowest popular trend in 2030 in
British
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 around about 3
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millions
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.
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, the average of
British
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 people who were using
train
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the train
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was
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apply
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slightly
increasing
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increased
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 from 1970 to 2000 around about half
million
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a million
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. What is more, there
were
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was
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 no change in the
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avarage
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average
 of it during 10 years from 2000 to 2010.
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 , it was suddenly climbing up from 3
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millions
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million
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 to 5
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millions
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million
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 from 2010 to 2030
while
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 it was the lowest
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avarage
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average
 in 1970 about 2.5 million. For more details, the rate number of
British
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 people using car was a biggest about 5
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millions
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million
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 than using train or bus in 1970. It was rapidly increasing from 1980 to 2000 and from 2010 to 2030.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words avarage, british, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • commute
  • mode of transport
  • fluctuating trend
  • downward trend
  • public transport policies
  • preferences
  • railway infrastructure
  • economic factors
  • environmental factors
  • technological factors
  • sustainable commuting
  • noticeable increase
  • investments
  • dominance
  • propensity
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