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Some people feel that cities should allow for spaces for graffiti while others feel it should be banned. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion

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Many individuals
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 the opinion that cities should permit
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spaces
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 for
graffiti
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 others argue that it should be prohibited.
This
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 essay will discuss both perspectives,
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 presenting my opinion. On the one hand,
graffiti
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 is a form of self-expression and art. Cities providing several areas for
graffiti
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 can nurture creativity.
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 might cause
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significant
art works
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 and bring
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 and vibrancy to urban
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.
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, these urban
spaces
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 might become
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 attractions.
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,
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 level of the city may experience a rise and the
tourist
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 revenues might increase.
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, in France, there is a famous
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 artist named Banksy whose artwork has become one of the most famous
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 attractions in the entire country. I totally agree with
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 side, in my point of view, not only government should allow it,
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 should support
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 artists too.
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, supporters of the other side claim that there are several causes of why it should be banned,
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, not all
graffiti
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 is considered
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art, in fact, most of it is painted randomly.
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, it can affect the general view of towns,
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, individuals who do that are mostly careless about what they leave behind after they
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 drawing.
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, the image of neighbourhoods can be ruined.
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, criminal gangs usually use
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 type of paint to communicate with their gang members or their enemies,
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, by allowing that, the government could be helping criminal activities and the crime level of the city might increase.
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, allowing
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 for
graffiti
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 might nurture
creativity
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the creativity
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 level of the artists and
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 these places might become
tourist
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 attractions. But
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 it might cause a disturbing view in towns and help criminal gangs in different ways. Personally, I believe if
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 is allowed under limited circumstances, negative aspects can be solved and it can be beneficial for cities.

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coherence cohesion
You provided a clear introduction and conclusion, which set out the essay structure effectively. However, you could improve your essay by ensuring that each paragraph has a clear central theme and that all sentences within those paragraphs are clearly linked to that theme.
task achievement
In terms of task response, you have addressed the prompt by discussing both views and providing your opinion. Nevertheless, the development of ideas is somewhat uneven, and your essay would benefit from more equitable treatment of both views and a more explicit statement of your personal stance towards the end. Make sure to fully elaborate on how the negative aspects can be resolved as part of your argument.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban art
  • vandalism
  • vibrancy
  • aesthetic
  • decline
  • creative expression
  • cultural asset
  • legal ramifications
  • marginalized groups
  • community engagement
  • ethical considerations
  • gentrification
  • zoning regulations
  • public space
  • civic responsibility
  • curated walls
  • street artists
  • social commentary
  • property rights
  • anti-graffiti coatings
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