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The graphs below show the total percentage of films released and the total percentage of ticket sales in 1996 and 2000 in a country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The graphs below show the total percentage of films released and the total percentage of ticket sales in 1996 and 2000 in a country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The bar graphs delineate the proportion of
film
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 manufactured and the percentages of ticket sales in one country in two years, from 1996 to 2000.
Overall
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, the most significant
film
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 released could be seen in
drama
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films
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,
while
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 the romantic
film
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 bucked the trend throughout the period. It is
also
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 noticeable that the highest percentage of ticket sales was related to
comedy
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films
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 over the years More specifically, the data for
drama
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films
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 ranked first at over 25%, followed by
comedy
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 and fantasy with 20% and nearly 13%, respectively. In general, over the next 4 years, the percentages for these types of
films
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 witnessed an increase at 35%, 25%, and 17%, respectively,
whereas
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, the romance
films
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 stayed relatively stable throughout the period Regarding the remaining features,
while
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 the proportion of
drama
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films
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 accounted for the most types of
film
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 released, the total ticket sales of
comedy
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films
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 stood out at the top at 20% in 1996.
In addition
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,
while
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 the types of
drama
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,
comedy
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 and fantasy
films
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 rose significantly over the next period, the opposite was true for that of romantic
films
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 at lower than 3% in 2000
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words film, drama, films, comedy with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • depict
  • significant increases/decreases
  • highlighting
  • drawing comparisons
  • discrepancies
  • notable trends
  • unexpected findings
  • anomalies
  • phenomenon
  • emphasizing
  • evolution
  • implications
  • producers
  • distributors
  • audiences
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