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the graph below shows the percentage of part _time workers in each country of the United Kingdom in 1980 and 2010.

the graph below shows the percentage of part _time workers in each country of the United Kingdom in 1980 and 2010.
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The presented bar chart delineates the proportion of part-time employees in four notions of The United Kingdom from 1980 to 2010. In general, it was conspicuous that the number of individuals working in part-time jobs increased, except
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 Ireland.
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, an interesting point is that Wales always had the most significant number of people working in part-time jobs. Turning to the top two highest non-full-time workers, Wales always dominated among other countries and had an upward trend by starting at approximately 30% and ending around a third.
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, the number of
labors
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 increased significantly
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 5% between 1980 to 2010. As regards the rest of
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, there was a dramatic growth in Scotland compared
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 because
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 country had the highest spread between the time frame.
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, only Northern Ireland experienced a slight decline compared
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 notions, from well beneath 20% in the first period to just across 10% in the end.

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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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