In the past when students did a university degree, they tennded to study their own country. Nowdays , they have more opportunity to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?
A long time ago learners used to do tertiary school in their
orignal
country whilst, these days they have more access to study overseas as Correct your spelling
original
this
have
got many benefits Change the verb form
has
such
as good standards of living and high salaries.However
, they are also
demerits of learning in a foreign land as they will be communication barriers as well as
cultural differences
.
In the present day
people now choose to study in another nation because of Add a comma
day,
high
salaries that attract them.Correct article usage
the high
This
is a positive development because it allow
humans to live a good quality life with a lot of money that covers all the basic expenses and luxurious expenses.
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allows
Furthermore
,another merit of studing
abroad Correct your spelling
studying
that is
an upshot is that it allows one to have exposure.Attending school in a different country allows one to have opportunities to interact with others thereby interacting with different people gives us chances to have exposure and analyzing
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perspective
.
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perspectives
However
, they
are drawbacks Correct pronoun usage
there
of
studying abroad as you will be more likely to face problems Change preposition
to
such
as language barriers and cultural differences
.In a foreign land
one can encounter some Add a comma
land,
differences
on
culture because of different societal values and norms.
In conclusion, back Change preposition
in
then
the
students used to learn in a local university whilst, in the present day people visit other nations for learning purposes Correct article usage
apply
this
is a growth that have
advantages as students can get employment with better salaries abroad Change the verb form
has
as well as
exposure.Neverthelses
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Nevertheless
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international
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internationally
such
as language barrier
and cultural Fix the agreement mistake
barriers
differences
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