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In the past when students did a university degree, they tennded to study their own country. Nowdays , they have more opportunity to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

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A long time ago learners used to do tertiary school in their
orignal
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original
 country whilst, these days they have more access to study overseas as
this
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 got many benefits
such
 as good standards of living and high salaries.
However
, they are
also
 demerits of learning in a foreign land as they will be communication barriers
as well as
 cultural
differences
. In the present
day
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 people now choose to study in another nation because of
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 salaries that attract them.
This
 is a positive development because it
allow
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 humans to live a good quality life with a lot of money that covers all the basic expenses and luxurious expenses.
Furthermore
,another merit of
studing
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studying
 abroad
that is
 an upshot is that it allows one to have exposure.Attending school in a different country allows one to have opportunities to interact with others thereby interacting with different people gives us chances to have exposure and
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 things from many
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,
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 are drawbacks
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 studying abroad as you will be more likely to face problems
such
 as language barriers and cultural
differences
.In a foreign
land
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 one can encounter some
differences
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 culture because of different societal values and norms. In conclusion, back
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students used to learn in a local university whilst, in the present day people visit other nations for learning purposes
this
 is a growth that
have
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 advantages as students can get employment with better salaries abroad
as well as
 exposure.
Neverthelses
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Nevertheless
,
they
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 are negatives of studying
international
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internationally
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 as you may face problems
such
 as language
barrier
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barriers
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 and cultural
differences
.
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