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In order to study at university students are required to pay expensive tuition fees. Not all students can afford them so some people think that university education should be free for everyone. To what extent do you agree?

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There is no disbelief that high education fees in Universities are very controversial and it has stimulated an energetic debate among communal across the world. One school of thought asserts that university education should be free for everyone
while
 others disbelieve it.Personally, I am in favour of the latter view. First of all,some people
believes
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 that universities play a vital role in student's lives.
Due to
 its high level of study and intensity of the course makes someone perfect in their field.
Thus
, universities should be free for all. So that, everyone from every part of the
country
 can join and learn from these institutes for their bright future.
Moreover
,the young generation of any
country
 are pillars of that
country
 who will represent their
country
 in various fields like leadership, Doctors or Scientists.
Thus
, these institutions should be free for all individuals so that they can play
a
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 important role in the success of a
country
. On the
flipside
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, some individuals assert that learners can afford the fees and they should pay
it
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 for their studies.
In addition
, they
also
 thought that it
is
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 the return for teachers of their hard work.
However
, they
also
 have to pay for their expenses or Teacher staff for their duty,if students do not pay the fees so from where they will be able to pay their salary
.
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 In conclusion,as far as I am concerned, the Learning
institute
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should be free of cost so that individuals from every part of the world or from every type of financial background can join and learn from these.One day they will become great professionals and represent their
country
.
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