Nowadays more and more people decide to have children later in their life. What are the reasons? What are the solutions for this problem?
It is undeniable that
people
are putting some important decisions on hold these days Use synonyms
due to
their hectic Linking Words
schedule
and Fix the agreement mistake
schedules
Linking Words
also
giving birth has become a later decision Rephrase
apply
too
in Rephrase
apply
people
's lives. I will discuss the reasons Use synonyms
that
why Correct word choice
apply
people
decide to have a child in later life Use synonyms
as well as
some remedies to tackle Linking Words
this
obstacle in the upcoming paragraphs.
Linking Words
To begin
with, Linking Words
first
and foremost reason Correct article usage
the first
about
having Change preposition
for
children
in later life is inflation. Use synonyms
This
means that market prices and Linking Words
education
budgets have been increased in these Use synonyms
years
and Use synonyms
people
are not strong Use synonyms
financially
to fulfill their needs Rephrase
enough financially
as well
Linking Words
as
they are not able to pay school fees in earlier Correct word choice
and
years
of marriage. In Africa, Use synonyms
for example
, Linking Words
couple
decides to have a baby after four Add an article
the couple
a couple
years
of marriage as they start allocating money in earlier Use synonyms
years
of marriage to provide a good Use synonyms
education
to their Use synonyms
offsprings
in Fix the agreement mistake
offspring
coming
times. Correct article usage
the coming
Hence
, Linking Words
children
's demands are 60% higher than Use synonyms
previous
generations, Change preposition
in previous
therefore
, parents have to work more Linking Words
years
to reach Use synonyms
on
that level so that they Change preposition
apply
could
take responsibility Wrong verb form
can
of
a child.
To mitigate Change preposition
for
this
problem, Linking Words
this
issue requires the intervention of the government because if inflation is decreased Linking Words
then
stress might be reduced in Linking Words
individuals
life and Change noun form
individuals'
individual's
people
would work Use synonyms
less
hours and can think about Change the quantifier
fewer
children
in earlier Use synonyms
years
. Use synonyms
Secondly
, providing free Linking Words
education
until secondary school assists parents to not Use synonyms
concerning
about Replace the word
concern
Use synonyms
education
burden of their Correct article usage
the education
children
Use synonyms
then
they will be excited to increase family members because they would not have any worries about expensive tuition fees. Linking Words
In addition
to Linking Words
this
, medical services must Linking Words
aware
women about certain ages of pregnancy as if ladies opt to have a baby after Add a missing verb
be aware
thirty five
Add a hyphen
thirty-five
years
Use synonyms
then
there could be some complications in Linking Words
this
process.
In conclusion, Linking Words
although
higher costs of products and school fees are the cause of Linking Words
delay
in pregnancy Fix the agreement mistake
delays
but
these obstacles can be mitigated by providing awareness about it Remove the conjunction
apply
as well as
reducing costs of everything and assisting Linking Words
people
Use synonyms
in
expenses by Change preposition
with
government
.Correct article usage
the government
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