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The map below show a school in 1985 and the school now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below show a school in 1985 and the school now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two maps present the alterations of an educational institution from 1985 to
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the recent
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recent
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present
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 time. By and large, there are lots of changes in facilities; some have
removed
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 and others have
reduced
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 including the increase of pupils number who
enroll
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into
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this
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 school.
Initially
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, the entrance, the
exitm
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exit
exits
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 and the office of the school remain the same.
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However
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 the library has changed into
Learning
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a Learning
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 Resource Centre and Computer Room. The classroom block which
in
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previous
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have
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 2 storeys had enlarged into 3 storeys. The car park has been diminished as
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 as the road link from entrance and exit to playing fields. The size of playing fields
also
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have
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 become smaller
due to
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 the
built
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 of
Pool
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 and Fitness Centre. If in 1985 the number of
students
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attended
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 the institution
only
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 1500
students
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then
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 the number of
students
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enroll
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enrolled
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 now
have
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has
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 peaked at 2300
students
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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