The table below shows the number of visitors to ashdown museum before and after being refurbished
The table below shows the
amount
of Change the quantifier
number
visitors
to Ashdown Museum during the years after and the year before it was modernized. After the table
there Add a comma
table,
is
the charts that show the Change the verb form
are
result
of surveys asking people how satisfied they were with their visit Fix the agreement mistake
results
Change preposition
to thos
thos
Correct your spelling
those
museum
, during the same two periods.
It is obvious that the number of Fix the agreement mistake
museums
visitors
significantly increased after the refurbishment
from 74000 before the reconstruction to 92000 after it had been done. Now let’s look at the charts. The year before refurbishment
shows a negative pattern: the results of survey
illustrate that only 15% of Correct article usage
the survey
visitors
were very satisfied and the number of dissatisfied people was 40%. The year after refurbishment
illustrates that the number of dissatisfied visitors
declined and became 15%, on a
contrary, people who were satisfied increased to 35%. Comparing the Correct article usage
the
amount
of satisfied Change the quantifier
number
visitors
we can also
see an upward trend (it increased from 30% to 40% after the refurbishment
).
To sum up
, we can say that all work
that has been done to attract new Correct article usage
the work
visitors
to Ashdown Museum has reached its aim.Submitted by kellyanne.henney on
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