the map shows developments, which took place in the bookstore between 2000 and now.

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This

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graph illustrates that the bookstore has been developed since 2000.

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, a lot of facilities are built nowadays,

while

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some rooms were eliminated and replaced.

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, several areas have remained in

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period. First of all, Fiction in the north of the bookstore is four times smaller than before because it was divided into four parts equally. At present, another three parts are acquired by Art, Hobbies, and Cookery. Meanwhile,there are three tables and several chairs

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installed in the

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of the bookstore, which is the original place of these facilities.

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, it can be observed that Non-Fiction was moved from the south area to the

east north

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corner and replaced

another

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Fiction in these 23 years,

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Cafe

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the Cafe

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built in the original space of Non-fiction.

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, Travel, New Books, Service Desk, and Entrance

were

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not changed between 2000 and now.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

150 words

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