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The chart below show the number of magazines sold per person in five countries in 2003 and 2005, with projected sales for 2007. Summarize the information by describing the main features of the charts and making comparisons where appropriate.

The chart below show the number of magazines sold per person in five countries in 2003 and 2005, with projected sales for 2007. Summarize the information by describing the main features of the charts and making comparisons where appropriate.
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The chart provides information about the quantity of
magazine
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magazines
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 sold per
person
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 in five countries between 2003 and 2007.
Overall
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,the number of
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the magazine
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magazine
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magazines
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 sold per
person
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 in
country
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 A,
country
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B
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 and
as well as
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in
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in-country
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country
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C
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 experienced a downward trend over the period,
while
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country
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D's
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D
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 sold
magazines
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quanity
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quantity
 a
person
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 displayed a constant growth.
Lastly
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,in
country
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E
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 the number of
magazines
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 had
sever
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severe
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 fluctuations during the years.
To begin
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 with,in 2003
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country
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Country
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 A 's every human bought almost 50
magazines
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,which was approximately 2
magazines
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 less compared with
Country
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B
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 in that same year.In terms of
country
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C
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 and
country
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 D, around 35 and 18 respectively,
magazines
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 were sold
every
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in every
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cityzens
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city
.
Finally
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,merely 5
magazines
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 were sold per
person
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 in
country
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e
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.
The
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In the
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 next 2 years,the
quanity
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quantity
quality
 of
magazines
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 per
person
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 in
country
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 A,
country
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B
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 and
also
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 in
country
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C
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 decreased slightly,
while
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 in
country
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 D and in
country
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E
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 the number of
magazine
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magazines
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 sold per
person
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surge
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surged
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 to some extent.In 2007,
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country
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Country B
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b
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 stayed in his leadership to around 43
magazines
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 per
person
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,afterward,
country
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 A
with
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apply
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its
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apply
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approximately 38 journals.With regard to
remained
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remaining
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 countries,
country
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c
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 reached its lowest point to around 32 publications sold per
person
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, meanwhile after a huge
clim
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climb
claim
 for several years in
country
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 D every
person
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 had 23 publications.
Finally
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,in
country
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E
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, the higher it went, the lower it became
in
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at
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 the end of the period (95
magazines
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 sold per
person
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).

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally, while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words person, country, b, c, magazines, e with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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