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The chart below show the number of magazines sold per person in five countries in 2003 and 2005, with projected sales for 2007. Summarize the information by describing the main features of the charts and making comparisons where appropriate. You should write at least 150 words.

The chart below show the number of magazines sold per person in five countries in 2003 and 2005, with projected sales for 2007. Summarize the information by describing the main features of the charts and making comparisons where appropriate. You should write at least 150 words.
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The chart provides information about the quantity of
magazine
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magazines
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 sold per
person
 in five countries between 2003 and 2007.
Overall
,the number of
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the magazine
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magazine
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magazines
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 sold per
person
 in
country
 A,
country
B
 and
as well as
in
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in-country
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country
C
 experienced a downward trend over the period,
while
country
D's
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D
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 sold
magazines
quanity
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quantity
 a
person
 displayed a constant growth.
Lastly
,in
country
E
 the number of
magazines
 had
sever
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severe
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 fluctuations during the years.
To begin
 with,in 2003
country
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Country
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 A 's every human bought almost 50
magazines
,which was approximately 2
magazines
 less compared with
Country
B
 in that same year.In terms of
country
C
 and
country
 D, around 35 and 18 respectively,
magazines
 were sold
every
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in every
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cityzens
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city
.
Finally
,merely 5
magazines
 were sold per
person
 in
country
e
.
The
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In the
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 next 2 years,the
quanity
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quantity
quality
 of
magazines
 per
person
 in
country
 A,
country
B
 and
also
 in
country
C
 decreased slightly,
while
 in
country
 D and in
country
E
 the number of
magazine
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magazines
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 sold per
person
surge
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surged
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 to some extent.In 2007,
country
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Country B
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b
 stayed in his leadership to around 43
magazines
 per
person
,afterward,
country
 A
with
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apply
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its
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apply
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approximately 38 journals.With regard to
remained
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remaining
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 countries,
country
c
 reached its lowest point to around 32 publications sold per
person
, meanwhile after a huge
clim
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climb
claim
 for several years in
country
 D every
person
 had 23 publications.
Finally
,in
country
E
, the higher it went, the lower it became
in
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at
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 the end of the period (95
magazines
 sold per
person
).
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally, while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words person, country, b, c, magazines, e with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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