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The chart below shows the number of computers sold at three conputer stores in Ho Chi Minh city between 2000 and 2005.

The chart below shows the number of computers sold at three conputer stores in Ho Chi Minh city between 2000 and 2005.
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The line graph depicts how many
computers
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 were sold in the three computer stores in Ho Chi Minh City from 2000 to 2005. It could be seen The Tech Guys
store
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 started to sell
the
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computers
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 not enough goods, but after nearly three and half years soared their selling and became the most computer seller
store
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 in the city. The first glimpse, we can assure you that the Laptop World
store
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 has the highest rate of selling
computers
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 among those two stores with 8,000
computers
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 in 2000. But after a single year Computer Plus
store
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 took the market share by selling quite similar to
that
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 Laptop World
store
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(8,000
computers
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).
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Moreover
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this
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store
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 sold its product more and more and reached
to
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10,000
computers
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 up until 2002. By declining to 4,000 sales in 2003, the Laptop World
store
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 experienced a terrible year and lost the market share
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 the other two stores.
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, The Tech Guys stock that steadily sold its
computers
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 earned the highest market share between these three companies reaching 14,000 sales in just 5 years.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words computers, store with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sales figures
  • trend
  • growth
  • decline
  • anomalies
  • market share
  • year-on-year
  • peak sales
  • fluctuation
  • steady increase
  • dramatic drop
  • period
  • lead in sales
  • comparison
  • exceed
  • data points
  • speculation
  • observation
  • analysis
  • computer retailer
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