The rapid advancement of technology has significantly transformed various aspects of our lives. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this technological progress, and how can individuals and societies adapt to these changes?

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There is no denying the fact that the rapid technological revolution has massively impacted our lives.

This

essay will discuss the advantages,

as well as

the disadvantages of

this

advancement, and suggest some techniques for people and societies to adapt to these changes. On

one

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hand, there are many advantages of

this

rapid improvement of technologies.

Firstly

, it makes our lives easier and more convenient than before.

In addition

, it makes our universe like a small village.

In other words

, it affected our daily

life

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lives

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positively by making our movements easier and increasing our ability to connect with

far

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relatives.

For example

, I'm located in Saudi Arabia, and my parents are living in Palestine, even though it is a far distance, I can call them with mere a click on my smartphone.

On the other hand

, I can consider some disadvantages,

such

as the cut of the physical connections. It is

also

possible to say that it has reduced face-to-face meetings,

consequently

, it has some negative impacts.

Moreover

, it increases the potential to cheat, because we become not able to recognize others' reactions in some situations.

For instance

, if you have an online interview or exam, it will be easy for you to search the internet for the answers. In terms of

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adaptation techniques, individuals and societies can adapt by increasing people's awareness about the positive sides of

this

improvement and how they significantly added value to our lives. Another point to consider is that each person should be keen on life-long learning

as well as

acquiring new skills. In conclusion, there are many advantages and disadvantages. It

also

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true that there are many available ways for people to adapt to these changes.

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coherence cohesion

You need to ensure that your essay has a clear and logical structure throughout. Use a variety of linking words and organize your paragraphs effectively.

task achievement

Make sure to present both sides of the argument (advantages and disadvantages) in a balanced manner, and offer clear, developed ideas to support them.

coherence cohesion

The introduction and conclusion are present but could be developed further to better summarize the main points and reinforce your position.

task achievement

Specific examples are provided but could be more detailed to strengthen your arguments.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

284 words

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The rapid advancement of technology has significantly transformed various aspects of our lives. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this technological progress, and how can individuals and societies adapt to these changes?

In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a country, while others believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount people can learn.

The best way to solve traffic and transportation problems is to encourage people to live in cities rather than suburbs or countryside. What extent do you agree or disagree?

The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some people argue that it is the government’s responsibility to transport children to school, while others believe that parents should do that. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Doing an enjoyable activity with a child can develop better skills and more creativity than reading. To what extent do you agree? Use reasons and specific examples to explain your answer.