In the future nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this idea.

People in
future
will have more smart options to explore information as technology is getting more
advance
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advanced
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in
upcoming
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the upcoming
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days.
However
, it is believed that everyone will have access to read all information on
internet
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the internet
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rather than spending funds on hard copies. I strongly agree with the statement and going to briefly discuss it in my forthcoming paragraphs.
Moreover
, I will
also
give some solid examples to support my opinion in a more fruitful way. There is no doubt that in
future
we will see the wonders of technology.
Due to
these
advancements
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a person will enjoy the perks of receiving all information on
single
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a single
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platform whether in
form
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the form
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of newspapers or
books
. One illustration of
this
is
development
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the development
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of social media forums. These
medium
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mediums
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have given individuals
opportunity
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the opportunity
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to share and read news from
comfort
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of their homes.
However
, in
future
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future,
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they will
get
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be
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more smart and effective in various ways.
Moreover
, they will be able to access these channels from anywhere in
world
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.
Secondly
, it is considered that the modern ways will replace the culture of buying
books
, as a matter of fact. There will be
large
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number of websites in
future
in order to download soft copies of these
books
.
However
, it is
mystery
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whether
this
practice would become popular among all readers or only
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a specific
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group.
For instance
, some people
likes
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to buy and read novels because it gives them satisfactory feelings. But in my opinion, even though some folks choose hard publications majority of them will still like to download it from virtual portals.
To conclude
, it is
belief
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that people will read news and
books
from online sources rather than spending money
of
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on
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printed ones. In my opinion,
this
statement is true because we are seeing
the
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lot of advancements in
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the futures
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futures
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future
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.
Additionally
, those advancements will
put
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a
significance
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effect
of
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the financial condition of individuals.
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