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The diagram illustrates the process of producing bricks from clay for the building industry.

The diagram illustrates the process of producing bricks from clay for the building industry.
The diagram shows how
bricks
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 are made from clay for the building industry.They are are 7 stages that are
also
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 shown.
Firstly
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, clay is dug from the ground with a big machine called a digger.After that, it passes through the roller and metal grid and on the metal grid it is sieved to remove some impurities before the next process.
Additionaly
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, to make the clay good for the next stage a mixture of sand and water is added so that it will form a strong mixture.
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,after combining the mixture it is put into a wire cutter so as to produce
bricks
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 with a similar shape.After
bricks
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 are moulded they are placed into the drying oven for about 24 to 48 hours the reason for
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 is to remove water.
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, the
bricks
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 are transferred to the klin which has moderate temperature.
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 after that they are moved to the next klin with the highest temperature.
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it is the cooling chamber where
bricks
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 are allowed to dry for 48 to 72 hours before they are packed
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lastly
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 after packing the
bricks
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 are loaded and they enroute for delivery.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bricks with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • brick-making
  • clay extraction
  • moulding
  • drying oven
  • kiln
  • firing process
  • cooling
  • quality control
  • environmental sustainability
  • building industry
  • raw materials
  • traditional versus modern
  • manufacturing process
  • packaging
  • transportation
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