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•Inventors are not as important to society as doctors •To what extent do you agree with this statement Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is undeniable that we are living in the modern era in which people desire a better
life
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. Thanks to
the
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inventions and experts,
life
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 has become easier. In fact, a part of
general
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the general
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 populace
hold
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 the notion that
doctors
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 play an important role in
social
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society
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while
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 others don’t
belive
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believe
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 so. They think that
inventors
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 take on
the
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 crucial role. I, personally, have confidence
in
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that they are equally essential, so I agree with
two
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 ideas. In
this
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 essay, I’m going to explain fully about the details. On the one hand,
inventors
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 play an indispensable part, in making
life
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 more comfortable. When the Covid – 19 breaks out, the advent of vaccines has helped repel the disease by reason of researchers. What’s more,
inventors
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 have invented many innovative products that help
life
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such
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 as light
bulb
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bulbs
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, mobile
phone
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phones
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, transports, you name it,… These are modern and useful,
thus
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 people can save time, save energy and
labor
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labour
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.
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, because of
washer
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the washer
a washer
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, everyone doesn’t need to wash
the
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their
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 clothes by hand, they just put the clothes in the washing machine and
clothes
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the clothes
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 will be clean.
This
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 is a testament to
inventors
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’ necessity.
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, If
life
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 doesn’t have any invention, the field of medicine won’t
development
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. For
the
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this
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 reason
that
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,
doctors
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art
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act
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 as those who directly carry out the tasks using the mechanism devised by
inventors
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. We are living in
the
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an
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 era
which
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in which
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 the phenomena of globalization have been more ubiquitous than ever before. That’s why, modern equipment is increasingly developed in parallel with economic development.
As a result
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 of technology and science, medical
equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
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are improve
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are improved
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,
doctors
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 make things
comtrue
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come true
 on
large
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a large
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 – scale.
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, nowadays, medical
expers
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experts
expert
 can cure cancer diseases thanks to contemporary tools but in the past, these diseases were considered incurable.
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, every occupation functions as a cog in a machine so I suppose that. We can not deny the statement
that
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 having two slides. What actually matters is that
inventors
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 and
doctors
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 should join hands for the same purpose.

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coherence cohesion
Ensure there is a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. The introduction should clearly state your thesis, the body paragraphs should each focus on one main idea with supporting details, and the conclusion should summarize the main points and restate the thesis.
coherence cohesion
Use linking words and phrases to connect ideas across sentences and paragraphs. This helps to create a more cohesive and readable text. Avoid overusing them or using them incorrectly, as this can confuse the reader.
task achievement
Clearly present your ideas using fully developed arguments. Each paragraph should include a clear topic sentence, followed by explanation, examples, or evidence to support the main point.
task achievement
Make sure to directly address the prompt. Your response should consistently reflect the extent of agreement or disagreement with the statement given. Include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience to adequately support your argument.
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