The chart below give information about level of education in Glasgow,a city in Scotland, in 2010.

The chart below give information about level of education in Glasgow,a city in Scotland, in 2010.
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The charts indicate five aged-groups female and male citizens of three educational levels in Glasgow in 2010.
Overall
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, the bar
chart
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depicts the highest
percentage
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of 24-35 ages of respondents who studied university degree,
whereas
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75 or above was the lowest
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with no qualifications.
However
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, the pie
chart
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reports the highest
proportion
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of men who studied at universities,
while
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the lowest
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of women who joined post-secondary educational institutions.
To begin
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with, from the bar
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, the largest
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of those 24-35 ages of respondents who learned from universities, at 76%,
whereas
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the 75 or above ages of the lowest
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, who did not have any qualifications, at 72%, it was less than 4% the largest one in 2010.
On the other hand
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, the pie
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reports the highest
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of men who studied at universities, at 32%,
while
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the lowest
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of women who joined post-secondary educational institutions, at 29%, women were less just only 3% than highest one in the same year.
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