Some people think that schools should choose students according to their academic abilities, while others think it is better to have students of different abilities studying together. Discuss both views and state your own opinion?
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Introduction/Conclusion
Ensure that your introduction clearly presents both sides of the argument and includes a clear thesis statement stating your own opinion. Your essay partly achieves this, but the thesis statement could be more explicit.
Coherence & Cohesion
Use a range of cohesive devices appropriately to help the reader follow the argument. You could improve this by using a wider range of linking words and paragraph transitions.
Supporting Main Points
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Logical Structure
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Task Response
Make sure to fully respond to all parts of the task. You should equally discuss both viewpoints and provide a reasoned conclusion. While your essay mentions both views, it would benefit from a more balanced discussion.
Clear & Comprehensive Ideas
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Relevant & Specific Examples
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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Linking words for giving examples:
- for example
- for instance
- to illustrate this
- to give a clear example
- such as
- namely
- to illustrate
- take, for example