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It is becoming increasingly popular to take a year off between finishing school and going to college. What are the advantages and disadvantages?

#year #school #college
In
this
 era,
gap
year
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years
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,
take
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taking
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 a
year
 off after graduating from school and before coming to campus,
become
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to become
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 famous in
the
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humankind.
Although
this
 trend looks like
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it is
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harms
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harmful
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,
gap
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a gap
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year
 possibly be a good choice as it
give
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gives
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 some benefits
for
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to
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 the
students
. On the one hand,
gap
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a gap
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year
 seems like
wasting
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a waste of
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time
 and
money
 since not all of the
students
 use
this
time
 wisely. When others start to study at college earlier, it probably means they will finish being the
undergraduated
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undergraduate
students
 before the
gap
year
students
.
This
 would make they can focus on
get
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getting
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job
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a job
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 and
earn
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earning
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money
 earlier. To illustrate, an undergraduate
student
 normally could finish their study in 4 years so that they potentially get a job in the fifth
year
.
However
, a
gap
year
student
need
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needs
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 1
year
 more than
the
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a
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 normal college
student
.
On
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the
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apply
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other
word
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words
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, unfortunately, a
gap
year
student
create
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creates
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 more
cost
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costs
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 and
earn
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earns
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money
 lately.
On the other hand
,
students
 who take a
gap
year
more
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are more
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 likely
have
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to have
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 more
time
 to do some preparations before
get
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getting
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 into the campus. By doing
this
, they will know their own passion in order to choose the major that they want to join.
This
 will decrease the
posibility
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possibility
on get
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of getting
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 into the wrong major compared to the
students
 that just
going
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go
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 to college after finishing school. Taking some courses and exploring a few fields in a
year
 between passing school and coming to university,
for instance
, will be beneficial for the
students
 to have a
well
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good
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 understanding
on
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of
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 their
strenght
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strength
strengths
 and opportunities in
that
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those
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 majors. In conclusion, taking a
gap
year
 without
a
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apply
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wise
behavior
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behaviour
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 has been creating disadvantages like wasting
time
 and
money
.
Nevertheless
, preparation can be done by implementing a
gap
year
 in order to avoid
major
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majors
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 that
not
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do not
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 relate to
students
' passion.
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introduction
Ensure that the essay has a clear introductory statement that outlines both the advantages and disadvantages of the discussed topic. Also, specify a clear thesis statement.
cohesion
Use a range of cohesive devices to structure the essay more clearly and coherently. However, avoid overuse or incorrect use of these devices.
main point support
Develop paragraphs with clear topic sentences, and ensure each main point is expanded with supporting details and examples. Beware of overgeneralization and strive for depth of analysis.
task response
Address all parts of the task, providing equal treatment to both sides of the argument (advantages and disadvantages) and ensure that your position is clear throughout the essay. Provide some direct examples if possible.

Your opinion

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