A friend has invited you to a party but you will not be able to attend. Write to your friend. In your letter •Tell your friend you can’t come •Explain why you are unable to attend •Arrange another time to meet

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Dear Tim, How are you
buddy
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? Thank you for inviting me to your place to celebrate your 24th
bithday
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birthday
. It was
such
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a cool idea to gather all of our old friends together like in old times after
such
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so many years. As you remember, I was planning to arrive
to
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in
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your city 2 days before the party, so that we could catch up, but
unfortunately
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unfortunately,
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I can't come because there is a problem with the trains to Toronto. I'm so sorry to mess up your mood. Apparently, all the trains were
canceled
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, and I'm not even sure if they are going to send me back my payment. But it is not a big deal
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to the fact that we won't be able to meet at your party. I am so sorry to mess up your mood right before your special day. But I'm sure as soon as trains start working again from my city, I can come and give my present to you. We could go to that one cafe you were talking about. See you soon,
Balzhan
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Balzan
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task achievement
Consider providing a more detailed explanation of the alternative meeting plan to enhance task achievement.
coherence cohesion
Try linking sentences more smoothly in some paragraphs to improve cohesion.
task achievement
Your letter has a clear and friendly tone, which is suitable for writing to a friend.
coherence cohesion
The letter begins with a nice greeting and ends with a sincere closing, demonstrating excellent greeting and closing.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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