Some people like to try new things, for example, places to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing things they are familier with. Discuss both these attitudes and give your opinion.

Some
people
prefer to spend their time on new
things
that they have never done. And other
people
like to allocate their time to regular
things
. Both of these ideas have advantages and disadvantages, but I would rather choose the second idea because
its
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of its
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simplicity and regularity. The simplicity of doing regular activities rather than
the
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apply
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new ones is the best
rasional
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rational
reason. Exploring new
things
needs more
times
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time
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,
powers
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power
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, and funds.
Despite
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, staying on what we regularly do
everyday
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makes us
on
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in
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calm
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the calm
a calm
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zone that does not need more strength.
For example
, someone who
choose
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chooses
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his previous job will be
more calmful
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calmer
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than who
choose
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chooses
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to develop his own business.
On the other hand
, the
regulirity
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regularity
of keeping on the regular
things
is the reason that
people
admire
to
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too
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. Because some
people
does
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do
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not like to do
things
that are not in their plan at all. And
also
, the regularity makes
people
be
dicipline
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discipline
disciplined
for what they do.
For example
, someone who has
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book's
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book
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plan will
be
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calmly think
what
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about what
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will they do tomorrow. In conclusion, I admire
to stay
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staying
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on
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with
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my routine activity more than
change
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changing
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it to new
things
because
its
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of its
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simplicity and regularity.
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