Foreign visitors should pay more than local visitors for cultural and historical attraction. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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although
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many
people
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believe that the
people
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who travelled
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different
locations should pay more for the
sight seeing
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sightseeing
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of cultural and
historial
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historical
artifacts
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artefacts
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.
whereas
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I differ
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statement to a large
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for some reasons. My position is argued
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with explanation in
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subsequent
paragraphs. Out of all
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the reasons
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, the foremost one is
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that foregin
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foregin
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foreign
outsiders
visitors
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should not be charged more for any historical attraction
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in equality all genders are equal in
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universe
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.
following
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cause of high money
expecations
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expectations
and
fullfill
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fulfil
their right demands,
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moreover
local
visitors
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knows the
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exact
situation cost of a service. To add
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as an example if
an
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local visitor
travel
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travels
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outside the country as per money conversion they
has
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to pay
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a little
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extra
becuase
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because
of their different excise rate.
additionally
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,
people
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go on holiday to relax and have fun. tourist can
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experience
the
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apply
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differnet
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different
cultures.
this
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is because
tourist
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the tourist
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trade is vital for economic growth it
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the
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employement
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employment
,
accomodation
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accommodation
and transportation.
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it
put
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the
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pressure on local resources
also
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a small rise can affect the cost of living
within
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for
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local
people
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due to
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forgein
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foreign
visitors
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have
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having
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highest
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the highest
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spending capacity.
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a
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an
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american
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tourist visits in
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India
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for
couple
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a couple
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of months as per basic
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needs
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expenses would be less than spending in their own country because of huge diversification in money forex exchange.
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, I would not overlook the other side too.
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with
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outsiders can easily
to
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pay extra
for adopting
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the service because they are enjoying the local heritage and it costs for
goverment
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government
to cover
up
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apply
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the
maintenanace
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maintenance
the
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area.
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Also
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local businesses
such
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as farms and small
shopkeppers
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shopkeepers
get support from their
forgein
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foreign
source of income.
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,
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the discussion, it can be
finally
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said that
foregin
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foreign
visitors
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can pay extra despite the fact
the
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that
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local
visitors
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will be supported.
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