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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You recently attended a conference and you would like to give a presentation about the information you gained by attending the conference. Write a letter to your manager asking for permission to give a presentation. In your letter: describe what type of presentation you have in mind what topics it would cover and how long it would take who should participate in the presentation and where should it be conducted You do NOT need to write any address. You should write at least 150 words.

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Dear Mr. James, I am writing
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 letter with regard to your approval for presenting time management skills for the new
sales
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team
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 that recently joined our company.
This
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presentation
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 will be based on the knowledge which I have gained from the conference that I attended
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 week. I would like to inform you that the main topic of
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presentation
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 will be time management skills as it will enhance the
sales
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team
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's knowledge of how to fulfil the targeted
sales
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 within the stipulated time.
This
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 two-hour
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 will assist employees in improving their
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 productivity. I have made a plan to ensure the target participants from the various ranks of employees of the
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team
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 especially those who have recently joined as a fresher.
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 to
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, some experienced salespeople from the same
team
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 will participate to make the learning session more successful.
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,
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presentation
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 will be conducted in the conference hall at 2.30 pm. I hope you will consider my suggestion and provide your permission for the same. Yours sincerely, Faisal
Submitted by faisalmahamood on

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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph introduces a new point and expands it fully before moving onto the next point for a clearer logical structure.
task achievement
Include more specific details about the presentation, such as examples of the time management strategies you plan to share.
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