Increasingly, many young people are deciding to work or study in other countries. What are the causes of this phenomenon? Do you think it is a positive or negative situation?
Over recent decades, many societies have been trying to immigrate to
another countries
. Replace the adjective
another country
other countries
While
there are some disadvantages to going abroad, I personally believe the benefits are far more.
Lack of high
prestigious universities and follow it, lack of work are the major causes of Correct word choice
apply
this
deciding
for many communities Replace the word
decision
especially
young Add the comma(s)
, especially
people
. For example
in undeveloped countries most of
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apply
people
cannot go school
or faculty, Change preposition
to school
that is
because a vast number of families are poor and their children have to stay at home and contribute parents. Additionally
, their society will not be able to provide professional educational areas and also
laborites for majors like medical science, agriculture, computer, and radiography. At the same time, since everyone have
not Add a missing verb
does have
a good studies
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a good study
good studies
so
they do not hold any work as Correct word choice
apply
better
as others who got taken from a good university. In Rephrase
well
this
condition, not only could not people
have university studies, but also
they do not gain jobs.
On the other hand
, there are those who subscribe to the view that migrating to other
nationality has several benefits. I believe that everybody has some rights in their life. Correct quantifier usage
another
For example
, every human has some abilities which direct correctly in the world that instead
, authorities can use them
for progressing their communities that can explain with some instances. When Correct pronoun usage
apply
people
go abroad for education or finding
a job, in fact, they will faced with a new culture and language, so they try to learn and Change the verb form
to find
finding
a great number of friends who are Change the form of the verb
find
different
nationalities. I Change preposition
of different
am
Verb problem
apply
also
believed
that they broaden Wrong verb form
believe
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their horizon
horizon
and if they go back Fix the agreement mistake
horizons
their
country, they will be able to develop there and become a Change preposition
to their
dominate
person.
In conclusion, Replace the word
dominant
although
going another
country might have some disadvantages, I believe the benefits are far more. Learning international languages and friends are two decisive factors which everyone Change preposition
to another
consider
.Change the verb form
considers
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