The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.
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The picture details the several steps and some devices to produce adhesive and after that, the manufacture of concrete from produced mud. Looking from an
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perspective, it is readily apparent that development adhesive is used in almost five stages and in the later step, the produced adhesive is a mixture of some ingredients for the manufacture of adhesive.
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with, limestone and clay are put on the surface screens to become powder through the crusher. After that, they transferred to the mixture for mixing together. In the next stage,
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fire flows into the rotating heater, the mixed material is passed on and poured onto the flat screen. Ingredients are passed into the grinder and become adhesive.
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, the produced adhesive is packaged. As can be seen, in the next step, to construct concrete, produced adhesive with some additional materials,
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as water, sand, and gravel, are mixed with appropriate amounts in the Concrete mixer, with 15%, 10%, 25%, and 50%, respectively.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • construction
  • cement-making
  • raw materials
  • crushing
  • mixing
  • heating
  • grinding
  • cement powder
  • packaging
  • distribution
  • concrete
  • versatility
  • strength
  • aggregate
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