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The pie charts provide a comparison of the ages of the populations in two nations: Yemen and Italy in 2000 and an estimate for 2050.

The pie charts provide a comparison of the ages of the populations in two nations: Yemen and Italy in 2000 and an estimate for 2050.
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The pie charts provide a comparison of the ages of the populations in two nations:
Yemen
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 and Italy in 2000 and an estimate for 2050.
Overall
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, both nations will observe aging populations: the rate of 0-14
years
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 will decline and 60+
years
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 citizens will rise.
However
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,
while
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 there will be an increase in the population of 15-39
years
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 in
Yemen
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, Italy will be experiencing a drop in the sphere of
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 age cohort. In 2000, just over half of the population in
Yemen
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 consisted of 0-14
years
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 old, closely followed by 15-59
years
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 old (46.3%). In
this
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 year, the 60+ age group was far and few between, which was a mere 3.6%.
However
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, in four decades, 0-14
years
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 old is expected to decrease by approximately 13%, 15-59
years
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,
on the other hand
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 significantly will be rosing by roughly 11%.
Finally
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, there will not be much difference regarding 60+
years
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 citizens, albeit a bit increase (at 5.7%) Looking at Italy, a similar change is projected to occur.
To begin
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, the proportion of 0-14-year-olds in 2020 was considerably lower than in
Yemen
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(14.3%); it will
also
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 be predicted to drop to 11.5 % like
Yemen
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.
Nevertheless
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,
although
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 the 60+
years
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 old population will be expanding from 24.1 % to 42.3 %, the 15-59 age group will noticeably shrink by about 15% reaching 46.3% in 2050.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words yemen, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "provide" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "comparison" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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