The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European countries.
The given chart demonstrates the
amount
of money
spent in four European countries for
six consumer goods.
Change preposition
on
According to
the illustrated data currency and spent money
measured
as Add a missing verb
are measured
thousand
pound sterling, and this
data based
on Add a missing verb
is based
amount
of Add an article
the amount
money
on sales of goods in Germany, Italy, France and Britain.
Firstly
, German people
and people
from Italy spent very
similar Add an article
a very
amount
of money
on buying personal stereos and tennis racquets (almost 150 thousand
pounds sterling). Likewise
, did
Britain which Unnecessary verb
apply
were
just over 160 Change the verb form
was
thousand
pound sterling. On the other hand
, French people
spent much more
less than other countries, nearly 135 Change the word
apply
thousand
pounds for each item.
Secondly
, items like perfumes, CDs and toys draw same
results for Germany about 145 Correct article usage
the same
thousand
pound
sterling.
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pounds
On the contrary
, the French and the British spent a lot of money
than other countries.
Moving to sale
of photographic film, Add an article
the sale
its
clearly seen that Correct your spelling
it's
the
France and the British spent much more Correct article usage
apply
money
in contrast
with other
5 items. Meanwhile, Germany maintained its Correct article usage
the other
amount
of spent
Change the form of the verb
spending
for
all items. Change preposition
on
Furthermore
, Italian people
showed such
a resemble trend except for toys and photographic films.Correct quantifier usage
apply
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