The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European countries.

The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European countries.
The given chart demonstrates the
amount
of
money
spent in four European countries
for
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six consumer goods.
According to
the illustrated data currency and spent
money
measured
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are measured
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as
thousand
pound sterling, and
this
data
based
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is based
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on
amount
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the amount
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of
money
on sales of goods in Germany, Italy, France and Britain.
Firstly
, German
people
and
people
from Italy spent
very
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similar
amount
of
money
on buying personal stereos and tennis racquets (almost 150
thousand
pounds sterling).
Likewise
,
did
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Britain which
were
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just over 160
thousand
pound sterling.
On the other hand
, French
people
spent much
more
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less than other countries, nearly 135
thousand
pounds for each item.
Secondly
, items like perfumes, CDs and toys draw
same
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results for Germany about 145
thousand
pound
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sterling.
On the contrary
, the French and the British spent a lot of
money
than other countries. Moving to
sale
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the sale
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of photographic film,
its
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clearly seen that
the
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France and the British spent much more
money
in contrast
with
other
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5 items. Meanwhile, Germany maintained its
amount
of
spent
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for
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all items.
Furthermore
, Italian
people
showed
such
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a resemble trend except for toys and photographic films.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, money, thousand, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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