The diagram shows how apple is canned. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant. Write at least 150 words

The diagram shows how apple is canned.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

Write at least 150 words
The diagram illustrates the stages in the process of packaging
apple
cans
.
Overall
, high-quality
Apple
cans
need to go through 14 steps before being delivered to customers. First of all,
apples
should be picked by farmers' hands and transported to factories by trucks. In the factories,
apples
will go through several different standardized procedures respectively, in the order are washing, checking each
apple
's quality, storing in freezers, checking weights and giving scores to every
apple
. Those processes could make sure every piece of
apple
in
cans
corresponds to the factory's standards and the government's policies. After those cleaning and confirming steps,
apples
will be sent to a place where can slice
apples
into small shapes to make sure each of the slices can be perfectly put in the
cans
. Afterwards, the
cans
that have
apples
inside will be sealed.
Next,
all the
cans
before shipping are required to boil in hot water in order to kill all the bacteria inside the bottle. The
last
stage in the industry is labelling, which highlights the brand name and nutrition content of
apple
canes, and following that all complete
apple
cans
will be stored in the storage rooms until the appropriate time to dispatch and transport to consumers.
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