The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
The bar chart illustrates different transport modes
such
as bus,
car
, bike and foot that have been used for working and travelling in a city in Europe from 1960 to 2000.
Overall
, the proportion of
car
Fix the agreement mistake
cars
show examples
was the largest in 2000
while
the lowest one was
also
car
Correct article usage
the car
show examples
in 1960.
Other kind
Change the wording
Another kind
Other kinds
show examples
of transport shows big differences. It can be seen that more than 30% of people chose
going
Change the verb form
to go
show examples
to work
by
Change preposition
on
show examples
foot
while
fewer citizens used
car
Correct article usage
a car
show examples
which was less than 10% in 1960. Buses and bikes have no big differences only around 8%.
Besides
this
, in 1980, more than one-quarter of people were going out by
car
which was the most picked transportation
whereas
a share of walking
was not show
Change the verb form
was not shown
show examples
competion
Correct your spelling
competition
to other transport. In 2000, riding
with
Change preposition
by
show examples
car
Add an article
the car
a car
show examples
had the biggest percentage which was 36%,
this
is similar to
travel
Wrong verb form
travelling
show examples
by walking in 1960. The second place is bus
then
bikes and foot show similar patterns, only less than 10% difference.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words car with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 3 times.

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