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The chart below shows the proporsional of Energy produced from different sources in a country between 1985 and 2003

The chart below shows the proporsional of Energy produced from different sources in a country between 1985 and 2003
The pie charts give information about the proportion of various power production in a certain country from 1985 to 2003.
Overall
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, it can be seen that oil formulation contributes the highest,
while
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 other renewable energy resources are the lowest.
To begin
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 with,
although
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 oil production was the highest energy production during
this
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 period, it decreased in 2003 from approximately half to 39% and still remained unchanged as the uppermost. Meanwhile, the percentage of nuclear manufacture experienced a sharp fall, from around a fifth to 8%. The third highest is natural glass, and it rose moderately by 10% to reach 23% in 2003.
On the other hand
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, coal manufacturing witnessed a huge rise by 14%, from 8% to 22%, similar to
this
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 the rate of other renewable power levelled up slightly by 3%.
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, different from the former categories, hydro creation
manage
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 to survive at 4% during the period of time.

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