The line graph shows the average number of weekly patients visiting four clinics of a hospital from 2010 to 2016.

The graph illustrates the average how many weekly sick persons coming

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different clinics of a hospital over a

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period.

Overall

, what we can see in the graph is that

,

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eye

diabetic and dental clinics sharply rose all over the period,

while

the

birth

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clinic

fluctuated slightly throughout the interval. At the beginning of the time, visiting

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the

birth

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clinic

was

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segment at around 240,

while

the diabetic was the smallest point only 60 sick persons.

Subsequently

, both,

eye

and diabetic medical centers with 125 and 100

patients

. Till 2012,

eye

,

birth

control

and diabetic health centers grew slightly approximately 280, 150 and 90

patients

. Until the end of the period, the

eye

clinic

increased dramatically with roughly 350

patients

and became the biggest category,

while

birth

control

fluctuated slowly.

Subsequently

, in 2012,

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medical center stood at

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80 sick persons,

while

dental rose significantly by 120

patients

. Until 2016,

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clinic

center

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rose considerably by 175,

while

dental

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health

center

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grew

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5

patients

and became the smallest segment.