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The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, A,erican, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.

The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, A,erican, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.
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This
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 chart shows the average number of
hours
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 spent each
day
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 by
Chinese
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, American,
Turkish
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, and
Brazilian
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tourists
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 on holiday
leisure
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 activities in Greece in August 2019. Generally, we can see that
both
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Chinese
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 and American
tourists
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 spend most of their
leisure
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time
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 reading
books
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,
while
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both
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Turkish
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 and
Brazilian
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 visitor enjoy their
time
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 at the beach.
In contrast
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, visiting places is something that the
tourists
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 are not really interested in, having the lowest number of
hours
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 spent on each group. As I said before,
both
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Chinese
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 and American
tourists
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 spend quite a lot of
time
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 reading
books
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 in their
leisure
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time
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.
However
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, it shows that
Chinese
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tourists
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 spent a longer amount of
time
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 reading
books
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 with a third duration of their
day
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 spent compared to the Americans.
Both
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 of the groups have the same pattern of interest in other
leisure
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 activities because the next activities that are sorted by the average number of
hours
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 spent are
both
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 enjoying the beach and
then
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 visiting places.
On the other hand
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,
both
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Turkish
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 and
Brazilian
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tourists
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 were spending much longer of their
time
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 on the beach. The graph shows that the
Brazilian
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 spent about 6
hours
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 of their
time
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 doing so,
while
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 the
Turkish
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 spent around 5
hours
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 a
day
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.
Both
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 of the groups have the same amount of
time
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 on reading
books
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 which is 4
hours
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 a
day
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, with an hour difference on spending their
time
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 on visiting places.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 90%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, day, chinese, turkish, brazilian, tourists, leisure, both, time, books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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