Nowadays parents are sending their children to trips abroad for educational purpose. What are the advantages and disadvantages of it?
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On the one hand, children who learn overseas will get beneficial impact like an
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is undeniable that they will gain knowledge that cannot be gained in their origin country, especially if the institutes were coming from topmost
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On the other hand
, attending school in the other states is more likely encourage
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