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Nowadays parents are sending their children to trips abroad for educational purpose. What are the advantages and disadvantages of it?

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It is still
debateable
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debatable
 on picking which education method is the best. These days, many parents believe that their children will get
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better learning if they learn in a foreign country.
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 phenomenon. On the one hand, children who learn overseas will get beneficial impact like
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international exposure which is
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used
 in
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 era.
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 is undeniable that they will gain knowledge that cannot be gained in their origin country, especially if the institutes were coming from
topmost
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 schools.
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, students will tend to learn more about diversity as they live in multicultural
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 with versatile races, religions, and cultures which give them opportunities to acknowledge more than
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theoretical
 materials. More than that, letting them
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study in unusual
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 means pushing them out of their comfort zones. Many
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individuals seek for
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environment
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 to step
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 so they can feel the development of themselves when they
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turning
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into
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self-sufficient and independent people.
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, attending school in the other states is more likely
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 the learners to abandon their own identities, namely their origins.
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 is why local schools are the most suitable place to learn about each
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individuals'
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 roots.
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student's
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 patriotism for the country as they will be taught about their own heritage as well
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 its elements where those two sectors
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 known as the fundamentals or key points before learning stuff. More than that, the school
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administration
 fees for
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 located
school
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schools
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 can be more than tenfold different
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 the local
schools'
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, not including
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the plane ticket and
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accommodation
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, to have an education internationally is like a like-edged sword where it
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 advantages and disadvantages.
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 is because to achieve a better degree from the global
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institute, students will lose their
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 of
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 much expenses to access the system itself.

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Introduction & Conclusion
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Logical Structure
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Supporting Main Points
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Complete Response
Address all parts of the task, making sure to cover both advantages and disadvantages with a balanced discussion.
Clear & Comprehensive Ideas
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