The chart below shows three different crimes and the number of cases committed between 1970 and 2005 in England and Wales. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The line graph illustrates
that
three different categories of illegal crimes and the Correct word choice
apply
amount
of cases committed from 1970 to 2005 in England and Wales.
Change the quantifier
number
Overall
,the graph apparent that car theft is the most increase illegal cases
in England and Wales.Fix the agreement mistake
case
While house
burgling is the second illegal case.Correct word choice
House
Whereas
street robbery is steadily at first and slightly rise
Correct subject-verb agreement
rises
at
the final Change preposition
in
year
.
From 1970s
, car theft Change the article
the 1970s
was
started from 0.40 Unnecessary verb
apply
million
and significantly rise
to 1.00 Wrong verb form
rose
million
in 1990
In the following year
that incresae
to peak at 1.60 in 1995.Correct your spelling
increase
increased
After
this
year
has gradually reduce
to 1.20 in 2005
In Change the verb form
reduced
case
of house burgling started from 0.20 Correct article usage
the case
million
in 1970 and up to peak
Correct article usage
a peak
at
0.70 Change preposition
of
million
in 1995.After that moderately reduce
to 0.5 Wrong verb form
reduced
million
in 2005.
On the other hand
, street robbery depict
that the Change the verb form
depicts
constantly
from 0.1 Change the word
constant
million
in 1970 to 1990.However
in the following next year
that increase
to 0.20 in 2000.Wrong verb form
increased
Also
constantly to the 2005Submitted by kungslowjam on
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduce" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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