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The chart below shows three different crimes and the number of cases committed between 1970 and 2005 in England and Wales. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows three different crimes and the number of cases committed between 1970 and 2005 in England and Wales. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The line graph illustrates
that
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three different categories of illegal crimes and the
amount
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number
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 of cases committed from 1970 to 2005 in England and Wales.
Overall
,the graph apparent that car theft is the most increase illegal
cases
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case
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 in England and Wales.
While house
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House
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 burgling is the second illegal case.
Whereas
 street robbery is steadily at first and slightly
rise
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rises
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at
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in
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 the final
year
. From
1970s
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the 1970s
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, car theft
was
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started from 0.40
million
 and significantly
rise
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rose
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 to 1.00
million
 in 1990 In the following
year
 that
incresae
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increase
increased
 to peak at 1.60 in 1995.
After
this
year
 has gradually
reduce
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reduced
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 to 1.20 in 2005 In
case
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the case
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 of house burgling started from 0.20
million
 in 1970 and up to
peak
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a peak
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at
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of
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 0.70
million
 in 1995.After that moderately
reduce
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reduced
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 to 0.5
million
 in 2005.
On the other hand
, street robbery
depict
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depicts
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 that the
constantly
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constant
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 from 0.1
million
 in 1970 to 1990.
However
 in the following next
year
 that
increase
Wrong verb form
increased
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 to 0.20 in 2000.
Also
 constantly to the 2005
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduce" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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