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The chart below shows information about the challenges people face when they go to live in other countries ▪️Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows information about the challenges people face when they go to live in other countries ▪️Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided bar chart above illustrates the preference of individuals from different age groups, 18-34, 35-54, and above 55 when moving to other countries. Notably, the activities were categorized into three different segments which are learning the local
language
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, finding accommodation, and making friends. Among people aged 18-34 years old, a substantial 46% indicated a preference for making local friends rather than the rest categories.
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 the elderly group (55+) showed a strong inclination as much as 54% towards learning the local
language
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.
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, the middle-aged group 35-54 years old, exhibited balanced tendencies across three activities with a percentage of 36% on making friends, 39% on finding somewhere to live, and 35% on learning the local
language
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.
Thus
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 the most interesting part which is learning the local
language
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 (will be their foundation communication), the younger group the less they
interested
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are interested
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 in it, and
conversely
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 for the elderly.

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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words language with synonyms.
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