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some people have the same type of job throughout their lifetime, while others prefer th change the type of job they do

#people #type #job #lifetime #change
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working in the same type of
job
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 in their
life time
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lifetime
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 has
benn
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been
 a
tooppic
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topic
 of
dicussion
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discussion
 for many years.
while
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 some
poeple
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people
think
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 be more partial to
diffrenet
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different
type
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types
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 of
jobthat
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jobs than
 what they are doing.
this
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 essay will discuss and preference of the opinion. Those
who
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whom
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ae
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are
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 believe in the same
of
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apply
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job
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 that
what
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apply
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they are attending and taking on their duty.
That is
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 an
opportunity
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 to answer the
biggets
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biggest
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illustrates
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illustrating
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 their
perfomance
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performance
 and
individually
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individual
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 results from their working in one
job
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on
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in
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 their
life time
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lifetime
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.
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Opportunity
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 of career to get promote and increasing of
income
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,
Secondly
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 organisation society is crucial to
attract
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attracting
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 their employees to
saty
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stay
 and be loyalty.
Thirdly
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,
benefitcial
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beneficial
of location and transportation were
fundermendal
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fundamental
 to let people stay.
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, humanity
put
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 the point on their
job
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such
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income
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, location, transportation, and services from their organisation
includes
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including
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wealfare
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welfare
.
On the other hand
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, I personally hold the view that through as
chaging
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changing
 type of
job
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. Some people
are agreed
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agree
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 to change their
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job
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jobs
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 for
an
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apply
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opportunity
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opportunities
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,
income
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, and experiences. For the instancesuch as large companies and more development
of
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apply
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technologies, they have more resources to encourage their member as much as they can.
although
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 they contribute to offer more
income
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 and chances for their experiences.
To sum up
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, working in the same
of
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apply
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job
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 in
thruogh
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through
life time
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lifetime
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 well-being individually
benefitcial
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beneficial
 in perspectively.
However
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, changing
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job
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jobs
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also
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is also
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 crucial to
achieve
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achieving
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 experiences and
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opportunity
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opportunities
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.
In addition
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 from my point of
veiw
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view
, both topics have significant benefits as much as people working in their duty.
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coherence cohesion
Pay attention to the overall structure of the essay, ensuring that there's a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. Each paragraph should have a clear main idea and follow a logical sequence. Avoid repetitiveness and aim for a cohesive transitioning between your ideas and paragraphs.
task achievement
Ensure you address the prompt fully by providing a balanced view with relevant, extended, and supported ideas. Your essay must have a clear position throughout, and it's important to cover all aspects of the task equally and in depth.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Job security
  • Stability
  • Expertise
  • Mastery
  • Career advancement
  • Personal growth
  • Development
  • Acquiring
  • Skills
  • Knowledge
  • Exploring
  • Career paths
  • Opinion
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