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the chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual inc9ome in 2007, 2011, and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

the chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual inc9ome in 2007, 2011, and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The given bar graph illustrates the number of US households by their yearly salary between 2007 and 2015. Units are measured in millions.
Overall
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, it can clearly be seen all categories remained relatively stable despite few fluctuations, except for 100 thousand dollars or more. The number of
household
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households
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 which had
minimum
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a minimum
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$
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of $
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50,000 and $75,000 income remained steady throughout the given period. The former stayed exactly at 20
while
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 the latter centered roughly around 14 from 2007 to 2015.
On the contrary
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, more apparent fluctuations were found
on
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in
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 the income
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of fewer
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fewer
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less
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 than $25,000 and in
range
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the range
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$
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of $
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25,000 to $50,000. After moderately growing by 4 in 2011, the former
then
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 experienced a small fall to around 27 in 2015.
Similarly
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, the latter stood approximately at 26 in 2007 before hitting a peak
to
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 30 in 2011. It
then
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 slightly fell by 2 in 2015.
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, in spite of
slight
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a slight
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decreased
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by
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of
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 2 between 2007 and 2011, the $100,000 category
then
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 experienced a dramatic
raise
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rise
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 to just below 35 by the end of the given period.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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