In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some
people
believe that in the new generation or era,
people
will be more comfortable to read some
books
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or
newspapers through their
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than buy a real
book
. I completely disagree
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I will give the reason I choose to buy printed
books
than
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rather than
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read through
internet
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.
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the main reason is the sensation when we read a real
book
than an online
book
. we can tell that there are some
people
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buy
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some
books
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of
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they like
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smell of the
book
, because from the
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psychology
physiology
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book
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can make us feel
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and it makes us more
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with
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the topic of the
book
that we read than from the online
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, if we want to read
online
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book
, we have to put more effort to not
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from
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in our laptop or handphone.
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,
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such
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a
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young
people
, it
hard
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to
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us to stay
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focused
if we read from our handphone,
such
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or a chat but if we read a printed
book
, we can get
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.
Second,
not every online
book
or
newspapers
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is free. The fact is there are some
books
that we should pay for that.
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, as a
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general
people
, not
every
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book
we can access easily,
the
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book
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books
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like articles
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and
encyclopedia
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if we want to read, we have to pay to read all
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. Even for some fiction
books
, we have to pay for the publisher management or the author, so it is not different
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the printed
one
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,
that is
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why
there is still a large of
people
still reading some printed
books
and
newspaper
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newspapers
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even in the future. In conclusion, there is
not
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big
different
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with read
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between reading
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the
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online
book
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books
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and printed
book
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but you will get
the
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more
beneficial
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with printed
books
, like you can read
everytime
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everything
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you want,
that is
why
im
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in
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the opposite side of
this
statement.
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Ensure that your introduction includes a paraphrase of the question statement and a clear thesis statement expressing your opinion. In your conclusion, summarize your main points and restate your opinion clearly.
coherence cohesion
Organize your ideas clearly and logically. Use a range of cohesive devices (such as "First," "Second," "In conclusion") to structure your essay. Be mindful of paragraph structure; each paragraph should have a clear main idea, followed by supporting details.
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When providing examples, make sure they are specific and directly relevant to your argument. If you mention research, it would strengthen your point to provide a short, specific reference or summary of the findings.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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