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The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year

The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year
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The charts illustrate the total amount of donations for
the
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children in the USA with the types of fund distribution and
revenue
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sources
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 in one
year
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.
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, the children's charity has a slightly higher
income
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 than the outcomes. The
revenue
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sources
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 had been dominated by the donated food and much money was spent on the program services. The total
children
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 charity received in one
year
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 is $53.561.580.
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, the
Revenue
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sources
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 dominated by the donation of food in a
year
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 was around 85,6%. The second highest from community contributions was 10,4% of the total.
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, 3% of the remaining
revenue
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sources
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 were from program
revenue
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, investment
income
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, government grant and other
income
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 with 2,2%, 0.2%, 0.2%, and 0,4%, respectively. In the previous
year
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, expenses were smaller than
income
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, about $53. 224. 890. For the most
part
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 money spent
for
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 program services is around 95,8%.
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, just over 3% was used for fundraising (2%) and Management and general (1,6%)

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Vocabulary: Replace the words revenue, sources, year, income with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • donations
  • grants
  • fundraising events
  • expenditure
  • administration costs
  • program expenses
  • direct benefits
  • indirect benefits
  • underprivileged children
  • education
  • healthcare
  • shelter
  • nourishment
  • medical treatments
  • basic needs
  • financial sustainability
  • transparency
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